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15 November 2005 @ 11:50 pm
Drabble.  
Title: Stiff
Series: Naruto
Disclaimer: Naruto and its characters do not belong to me.
Rating: R
Warning: Possible squick.
Length: 150 words.




She was amazingly pale, skin alabaster and glistening with the dew of just-after-rain. High spots of color only now began to fade away, bleeding back into her cheekbones. He touched a long curl of hair, plastered to the side of her face, torn loose from her normally tight buns. Like porcelain.

Neji bit his lip, hips rocking forward one last time as he came--dark blood leaked from the corner of his mouth. Stomach muscles clenched reflexively into neat squares as he collapsed over her, hair spilling like oil on her skin. Without a sound.

As he achingly pressed bloodied lips to the curve of her neck, he could almost imagine her chest heaving, the sharp twist of nails curving into his spine. And if he could just overlook the sharp angle her head twisted back at, the eyes startled and glazed, it might not be such a bad arrangement.
 
 
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hyakuirohyakuiro on November 16th, 2005 07:50 am (UTC)
Oooh, I love this! It's so beautiful in its bitter, dark, morbid way ♥~~
—are you my star?: guts -- shootingstarsshootingstars on November 16th, 2005 02:21 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
Xxxfire_vs_ice on November 16th, 2005 09:21 am (UTC)
Disturbing.
—are you my star?: angry naruto -- _sachishootingstars on November 16th, 2005 02:21 pm (UTC)
I tried.
Empress of the Taotao_empress on November 16th, 2005 02:17 pm (UTC)
ironically I read this on FF.net before I came to LJ. still as disturbing and heartbreaking as I remember it.
—are you my star?: fury -- shootingstarsshootingstars on November 16th, 2005 02:21 pm (UTC)
...Thanks?
Empress of the Taotao_empress on November 16th, 2005 02:37 pm (UTC)
oh, I'm sorry. I forgot to mention that I did like it. for some reason angst and sorrow is so appealing.
—are you my star?: are you seduceable? -- blooming_cosmoshootingstars on November 16th, 2005 02:42 pm (UTC)
Hahaha, it's fine.
emerald_iguanaemerald_iguana on November 16th, 2005 04:51 pm (UTC)
wow, i actually really enjoyed that. It reminded me of the Anne Rice books, really reminded me. Is that where u got your influence from?
xFx
—are you my star?shootingstars on November 16th, 2005 05:49 pm (UTC)
I've read Anne Rice, sure, but I wouldn't exactly say I've been influenced by her.
Al'angstyalex on November 16th, 2005 09:09 pm (UTC)
Necro! Neji is love.

One sentence bothers me, though:

'...just overlook the sharp angle her head twisted back at'
Just... seems wierd, ike the 'at' is in the wrong place.
—are you my star?: guts -- shootingstarsshootingstars on November 17th, 2005 06:37 am (UTC)
It was deliberately constructed to be an awkward sentence, thus referencing the situation. If I wrote it strictly in a grammatical correct fashion, it would read "...just overlook the sharp angle at which her head twisted back." Doesn't have the same sound to it.

=D
—are you my star?shootingstars on November 17th, 2005 07:05 am (UTC)
*in a grammatically correct
Al'angstyalex on November 17th, 2005 09:09 pm (UTC)
Haha, I was actually going to say the 'at which' thing.. but then that didn't sound right either. XD; Still, coolness.
Cosmo-sanblooming_cosmo on November 17th, 2005 02:58 am (UTC)
You did an amazing job with so little words...I heart drabbles...*is in awe*

Twisted in a good way....I love these kinds of things every once in a while. *thumbs up*
—are you my star?: deathbenotproud -- shootingstarsshootingstars on November 17th, 2005 06:40 am (UTC)
Thanks.
(Anonymous) on December 10th, 2005 05:18 am (UTC)
wait..tenten is dead, right? thats really...gross but if she isnt sorry but either way good fic