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23 April 2007 @ 03:30 pm
????????? A very weird NejiTen Drabble  

My first attempt on doing a cut!!! Does it work? Does it work? *anxious*

Title: The Dipping Snow
Summary: I don't know... everything is vague so I don't understand the fic myself... ^^ hahahahaha! but... "One snowy day... and the nature was playing with his heart."
Rate: K+

The snow was falling gently over the sidewalk, coloring the usually red colored path with white--soft white... gentle  white... White...

White was the color of his eyes.

He didn't understand why it fitted since all he saw now was white. Sea of white... The rooftop, the sidewalk, the road... Everything as white. Did he longed for other color to come before his eyes? Well... he didn't know... He didn't even think of anything as he strolled along the path... Walking atop the snow as silently as a leopard... Silent and deadly.

The trees greeted him when he arrived at the woods. They were supposed to be green... but now what was left were brown and white. The brown of the frozen wood... and the clear white of the snow, hanging on the branch as if mocking the leaves for not be able to come out at all. 

Mocking. Cold. White.

Fitted him. So much.

And the mist slowly surrounded the woods... Mist... white mist... Vague... like him. The atmosphere was just like him... describing his very self so clearly in front of his eyes. Somehow... he felt the mocking taunt of the nature.

You're so bare now...

I am. He thought. The weather was mocking him... Mocking him... for everything... The nature read everything. Even...

Flashes of brown and black suddenly visible behind the mist. Hissing of steel cutting the air... the sound of soft land on top of the snow... Flash of black cold steel... and warm... warm brown... Brown...

Her brown.

The woods hid her figure as she danced between them... As she danced inside the mist and between the trees... as she danced on top of the snow... as she danced in his heart.

The white mist was her curtain. The snow was her stage. The trees were her partner and the steels were her companion... A dance...

A goddess

A goddess in one white snowy day...

A goddes and a lover.

A lover that  was watching her in the mist... between the woods... on top of the white snow... behind his own glacial cell...

And suddenly she turned to look at him. Her brown eyes betrayed the cold with their warmth and her voice broke the silence of the cold wind.


And the nature... laughed at him once again. Laughing his bare heart.


But for now... let it be.

"Dance again, Tenten."

Dance again in my heart.


Note: Ah... that's definitely weird... Unyahahahahaha... What am I doing?? @_@

Hey, the cut works!!!

Current Mood: hopefulhopeful
Current Music: Shizukusa Yumi: Hana Kagari
panda_queen on April 23rd, 2007 11:59 pm (UTC)
It's not weird! :0 Don't say that, dear. I think it was beautiful. The way you described everything, I mean, it was gorgeous! :'D Anyway, yeah. I loved it. Hehe.
"Mea irs here aulla omnis"eshtar on April 25th, 2007 08:41 am (UTC)
Really??? I'm glad! Hahaha... thank you!! I'm glad somebody actually like it since I only write the colors over and over again because I don't know what to say next. XD I only want to try the cut... ;P and randomly make a fanfic. O.o... "Dipping Snow" What's the meaning of that?! @.@ Thanks a lot!! XD
panda_queen on April 25th, 2007 11:21 pm (UTC)
Yes, of course! :'D And don't worry around writing the colors over again, haha. Everyone does that once in a while, or all the time! It's kinda like what makes our stuff so unique. I wish I had guts. xD I want to post up some stuff, but, yeah. I mean, I'm a bit worried! D: (That no one'll like it. And for one, I have no idea how. xD I'm new to lj. soyeah. :0 )

And to me, "Dipping Snow," is a great title. Something different, from one of those unoriginal stories, "HIGH SCHOOL STORY, LMAO." (Not that I should be using that for an example. xD Lol. Immahyprocrite. XD I'm writing one right now. Personally, I love highschool fics. xD)
Lurlienelurliene on April 24th, 2007 12:54 am (UTC)
oo very beautifully well written 8D the ending was lovely but maybe it's just my own ignorance i didn't really see the connection between that and winter...maybe if i strain hard enough, i mean i can almost see it...hm...

well anyways, you still did an awesome job ^_^b
(and yay for working cuts!)
"Mea irs here aulla omnis": tenten eyeseshtar on April 25th, 2007 08:53 am (UTC)
To tell you the truth... well... maybe there is... NONE! XD Nyahahahahaha!!! I only love to think of how beautiful Tenten will look behind the mist.. dancing with steel... *cough*. Anyway... I didn't plan anything!!! I just randomly snatched the keyboard and type since I want to try the cut thing.(IT WORKS!!! IT WORKS!! LET US CELEBRATE!!) There was actually no ending, no plot, nothing in my head. And... again, to tell you the truth, I don't know how winter looks like since I live in tropical country. ;p. I just imagining things... XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
Lurliene: Lizzy: contemplating (P&P)lurliene on April 25th, 2007 07:48 pm (UTC)
lols (I remember when I got my first cut to work *nostalgic*)
you are sooooo lucky that you live in a tropical country i live in new jersey where nothing happens. ever. I mean, snow is beautiful and amazing (and it closes down schools ^^) - it's just so freaking cold! =_=
your drabble is pretty good considering that you had no plan and just started writing off the top of your head :) I cannot do that - it takes me weeks to think of a decent idea, and then I plan and mull over it, then I have to lure myself over to the keyboard with a cookie to actually start writing...so I applaud you for that ^___^
"Mea irs here aulla omnis": pandaeshtar on April 28th, 2007 12:09 pm (UTC)
THANKS!!! NYAHAHAHAHAHA!! THANKS!!! I, too, usually took a long time to get a decent idea but I guess I can force myself to make something simple on the spot when I'm in a good mood. We can do anything when we're in the mood, eh? ^.^ and cookies help. A LOT.

Ah, perhaps I'm lucky... but I want to feel how's like to see snowflakes out of your bedroom window and playing snowball with your friends. ^^ All I do in tropical country is playing 'galasin' (a very interesting game where there are two team. A team try to touch the opponent while their member could only move vertically or horizontally. The opponent will try to get to the other side by avoiding the guarding team. It needs strategy and agility as well! It's fun!) And there are only two seasons in tropical site: dry and wet. And in my city, there's almost no difference. The Rain City. That's my city's nickname. There'll always be rain regardless the season so... yeah.

Thanks for the explanation of snow! (I can only see ice in the freezer inside my fridge... =_=!) I wish I'll be able to go abroad in the future... Wish me luck!!!!