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24 October 2006 @ 05:21 am
[10 for 10] {Fic: White Out}  
Lurker finally de-lurking! I probably should have made an introduction sooner..but...ah well. Long story short, I'm Pluie. ^_^ I haven't written in almost four years now (and still oh-so-rusty), but my love for NejiTen has pulled me out of my hiatus. I wanted to contribute -something- to this awesome community...you all have inspired me to try to get back into writing again, but I sadly haven't had the time. I'm mainly a fanartist, but I work incredibally horrible night hours...but I had today off, so I decided to sit my bum down and write at least one drabble for the 10 for 10. I really, really, really want to finish all 10, but I don't think I'll be able to (I've got three days to pack up and move to another state ;_;). But as I said, I wanted to contribute something...and at the same time dust off my skills.

So I'm going to end my rambling and just get to the fic ^_^ I hope you all enjoy it as much as I actually enjoyed writting it.

Title: Blanked Out
Rating: PG-13
Characters/Pairings: NejiTen, Hiashi
Summary: Everytime Neji heard Tenten sing, his mind went blank. As the years go by, he finds that he doesn't really mind it.
Warnings: None except for it hasn't been looked at yet with the fine toothed comb of my beta reader.


The first time he heard her sing was after a particularly long and hard spar. He was simply relaxing under the shade of the trees as she happily cleaned and shined her used weapons. Usualy he rarely paid her attention as she did her daily maintenence, but a soft, melodical humming reached his ears and pulled him out of his relaxed haze.

His enhanced vision took in the sight of her. Small streamers of sunlight dotted around and on her, catching on the tiny dots of sweat littering her face and neck and arms. A light, rosy flush dusted her cheeks, eyes slitted in contentment, head tilted to the side slightly, and a small smile gracing her lips.

For the first time since becoming a team a year ago, Neji looked at his female companion. And he saw what he knew to be a battle-efficient young ninja as a girl. A completly contented (pretty) girl enjoying her task at hand. Her chest (he wasn't looking there...really he wasn't) rose and fell lightly with the humming.

And for the first time, Neji's mind went blank and filled with white nothingness.


The second time Neji heard Tenten sing was almost a year later. In the Hyuuga compound no less (his uncle had taken an unsual interest in his teamates, her more precisly, after that). It was during a weeks break of missions for Team Gai, and one of Neji's aunts took the oppritunity of enlisting Tenten as a babysitter.

Hyuuga were picky people about to whom they kept company with, and little Hideki was no exception. For whatever reason, he had taken to Tenten like an Aburame's beatles to chakra (including the energy draining. That baby could crawl fast). When his mother went away, he'd let no one babysit him unless it was "Tehteh" watching him.

Hiashi had had more than enough of the teething toddlers screaming and had enlisted Tenten as the babies premenant babysitter (coinciding the mother's trips with Team Gai's time off). Tenten didn't mind all that much. She liked the baby, she liked being able to spend some time with Hinata (the girls had grown a little closer after the chuunin exams), and she liked the quiet calm of the compound. She could see the stars clearly here than she could in her families apartment in the heart of the marketplace. Too many lights from the the shops and stands blocked out the twinkling of the stars, and the din of the late-nighters shattered any serenity one could find with star-gazing. So she counted her blessings everytime she was called to the Hyuuga's quiet, not-so-busy section in Konoha.

On this particular day, Tenten was taking care of a frustrated and teething Hideki, trying everything she could think of to sooth his pain. Finally, an idea hit her. When she was little, her mother would softly sing to her. The sweet, melodic voice would melt whatever fears, worries, or pains the little girl was feeling.

Without preamble, Tenten uncerimoniously plopped down at the edge of the covered walk, legs dangling off the side, and craddled little Hideki. Taking a calming, deep breath, Tenten closed her eyes and began a soft lullaby from her childhood. A soft breeze blew through the courtyard and carried her voice over to the only other two occupants.

The second the soft tune reached Neji's ears the young prodigy faltered in his defence and his attention diverted. Hiashi realized a half-second later that his nephew's attention was no longer on him, but it was too late for the clan head to stop his palm strike. The most he could do was shift the location of the strike from Neji's neck to his shoulder, off-balancing the young boy and sending him crashing to his rear in the dirt. The impact was enough to jolt Neji out of his stupor and shocked white eyes met equally shocked white eyes as he turned his head to look up at his uncle.

"I'm sorry, Hiashi-sama. My mind blanked out for a moment. It won't happen again."

'Yeah right.' Hiashi thought as Neji got up and bowed in apology. The elder Hyuuga's eyes flickered over to the obliviously singing kunoichi. Neji's eyes followed and lingered longer than neccessary. Hiashi's trained eyes picked up the light relaxation in his nephew's eyes, the slight upturn of his mouth, and the small dusting of red on his pale cheeks. Secretly, Hiashi smiled, delighting in the knowledge that Neji was finally, finally taking an interest in girls (he had slightly worried when he met Neji's male teamate and jounin teacher. Maito Gai may be a good physical teacher, but his loud personality was too much for the reserved Hyuuga. And the young Rock Lee was overly passionate about his declarations towards the opposite sex, especially to a certain pink-haired medic-nin-in-training. Hiasha thanked Neji's lucky stars for giving him the sane weapons-loving female). Hiashi couldn't have been any happier that it was Neji's teamate he was falling for. She came from a notable blacksmithing family, her mission record was looking promising, and more than half the family already liked her.

Hanabi had proclaimed Tenten to be one of the coolest kunoichi's she knew when the older girl had strung up one of their more obnoxious cousins. He had had the balls to dismiss Tenten as "just another useless girl" and he waken up a sick Hideki (whom had just gotten to sleep after many grueling hours of Tenten taking care of him enough for him to rest), causing the baby to restart his whailing. Hyuuga all over the grounds still shudder to this day with the thought of the great wave of killing intent washing over the compound. Peeved beyond belief, Tenten spared the annoying Hyuuga no more than the mere seconds it took for her to whip out senbon (Hanabi still pesters Neji to tell her where Tenten hides that many senbon) and impale the boys clothing to the wall opposite them...all without sparing a glance back as she threw them ("But she doesn't have the Byakugan! How'd she do that?").

Neji had tried to warn his Main Branch cousin (sort of. Truthfully, he and over half his family just wanted to see the haughty and mouthy teen get his butt kicked. But breeding demanded they never voice their wish) to back off. And of course, the boy didn't heed Neji's warning. His price paid was his glueing to the wall and the "useless girls" pissed off at him enough to "waste" her painstakingly crafted senbon.

Yes, Hiashi was certainly pleased with Neji's choice in a female to give his affections to.


The next time Neji heard Tenten sing was when he rested his head over his wife's growing belly, her fingers gently raking through his loose hair, and her chest gently falling and rising with her breaths.

This time, Neji didn't mind his mind blanking out into white nothingness.


I'm extremly proud of myself. It came out the way I wanted it to...and then some!

And I adore constructive criticsm. ^_^ I really hope everyone liked it ^_^
Current Mood: accomplishedaccomplished
Pandapandariko on October 24th, 2006 06:06 pm (UTC)
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!! Eeeeeeeeee!! :D
It was very very descriptive. I was impressed with the way you would describe in heavy detail what would happen when he paid attention to her.
Pluie: Takao- Oh so pretty *misty_wrties*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 12:49 pm (UTC)
>D If I bribe you write more...could we cosplay NejiTen at the next con we go to? Ya know...when we have more time to make the costumes non-rushed and complete? *_*
Pandapandariko on October 25th, 2006 05:15 pm (UTC)
Maybe, but even not so rushewd these came out pretty good. OH OH! I made Ninja shoes/socks. They look accurate but they need to be like attached to flip flops or something.
wingsoverwingsover on October 24th, 2006 06:39 pm (UTC)
Very cute. :) I always love Hyuugafamily ♥ Tenten stories. And Neji was hilariously besotted with her song. A few misspelled words here and there, but nothing major.
Pluie: Envy- *made by misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 12:55 pm (UTC)
I've read way too many "I'm not good enough for him/his clan's God-like and would never accept me/OOC whining" for my comfort. The (fanfic) world needs some more Tenten-loving Hyuuga members. ^_^
Toboe LoneWolftoboe_lonewolf on October 24th, 2006 06:54 pm (UTC)
*smiles* I've always loved the concept of Tenten calming Neji down. Or distracting him. XP And the singing thing, I've always loved that. That, and Tenten-weapons-love. =D Always.

Apart from a few spelling errors, I don't think Hiashi would even think "Yeah right;" even if it was in his own mind. I think of him to be so formal that "yeah right" doesn't fit. Of course, that doesn't mean he doesn't have a mischievious side...XP
Pluie: Neji- Confused Inside *made by misty_wrixmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 12:46 pm (UTC)
I adore the idea of Hiashi having a mischievious side, especially towards his brother's son >D And I completly agree that Hiashi saying/thinking "yeah right" is totally OOC for him... But my then (and still now) sleep-deprived mind just couldn't think of anything better. And it's been bugging the fudge out of me all day. I don't know why, but I'm at a total loss over this. Do you think you could give me a few ideas to help me along? I'd like to fix it up before I post it to ff.n.
Toboe LoneWolftoboe_lonewolf on October 28th, 2006 06:26 am (UTC)
Hmmm. I've been trying to think of different ways to rephrase it, but I'm about as lost as you are. ^^;;; For some reason even having Hiashi talk to himself is weird (which definitely doesn't make sense.) "If that is what you say" is about what I come up with. ^^;;;

I think the rest of the paragraph kind of describes the "yeah right" sentiment, such that you don't really "need" to having something explicitly stated there. You could have Hiashi holding down a smir, or pulling up a memory of Hizashi or Hiashi doing the same sort of denial (because hey, they were once married too XP).
Pluie: LeeSaku- Wait *misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 28th, 2006 08:07 pm (UTC)
But Hiashi does think to himself...only evidence of that we got is during the Naruto vs. Neji fight. So it's not impossible..just weird that he'd think something so...I wanna say modern, like "yeah right".... "If that is what you say" sounds a lot better than what I came up with! But I'll have a ten hour drive sunday morning to think it over, so you've defiantely given me something to go with...thank you! ^_^

But maybe the smirk would be a good choice to go with...
riri: smiles~!crimson_riot on October 24th, 2006 09:00 pm (UTC)
Let's make a club of shameless former lurkers.

I loved it when Neji stopped mid-sparring, listening to Tenten sing. Uberly cute story here. Wish I could get off my lazy-ass and finish mine.
Pluie: Gai *made by misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 01:01 pm (UTC)
I'll bring member jackets...and cookies...clubs need cookies.

I loved it when I wrote it >D I love the idea of Neji actually realizing Tenten's a woman and going "huh? When'd that happen??" ^_^ Wish I could stop my busy ass so I could start the rest of mine...barely had time for this one.
riri: check itcrimson_riot on October 26th, 2006 02:16 am (UTC)
I'll bring the disco ball!

I also saw the situation as Neji realizing Tenten has time for other talents that aren't centered around him.
Neji: "What? Tenten does more than fling weapons in my general direction?" -stare-
Feminine talents, nonetheless!

AP US History is my doom on wheels! u.u
Pluie: Envy- *made by misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 28th, 2006 08:11 pm (UTC)

Neji realizing Tenten has boobs (and he has hormones) alone is enough to ignore the oocness he'd go through.

Packing and moving my junk ten hours away is consuming my soul!
Eden: Jared and Jensenoverstreets on October 24th, 2006 09:07 pm (UTC)

MY mind went blank after I read this. *___* It was just so perfect. It was pretty, it was sweet, it was omg so cute! I demand you to write more Naruto fiction. DEMAND.
Pluie: Takao- Oh so pretty *misty_wrties*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 01:06 pm (UTC)
*cackles* YES I'VE BEEN KEEPING SECRETS FROM YOU!! HAHAHAHA!!! That's why I told you that NaruHina drabble I wrote was crap! See how better I can write now?!? My fanfiction days stopped about two fandoms before I met you.

If I wasn't moving this week, I'd be writting more sosoSO wanna write NejiTen pr0n...and fluff...but mostly pr0n >D .
riricrimson_riot on October 26th, 2006 02:18 am (UTC)
-being necessary-
Pluie: Envy-Good Thoughts *made by misty_writesxmidnightbluex on October 28th, 2006 08:15 pm (UTC)
Re: -being necessary-
PR0N!!!!1111! Pluie likes the bed (or any other surface they can reach) thumping smex. >D
riri: naughtycrimson_riot on October 28th, 2006 10:41 pm (UTC)
Re: -being necessary-
silverteardropxsilverteardropx on October 24th, 2006 09:30 pm (UTC)
AWWW NEJI!!!! THAT WAS VERY SWWEETT OF YOU!!! a bit out of chracter for u in the real life but WHO CARES I LOVE IT!!!
ANOTHER SURPRISE!! TENTEN IS A PREGGIE!! i hope neji suffers :evil glint: lol jk! but i do hope sasuke gets on tentens nerves that she became reallly anger and killed him MUHAHHAHA!!!-uh sorry about that lol! =]
Pluie: Team Gai- OT3 *misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 01:10 pm (UTC)
A little OOCness is nice every now and then...depending on the degree of OOCness ^_^

Couldn't help but put in a preggie Tenten ^_^
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Pluie: Kiba- Born to be wild *by misty_writes*xmidnightbluex on October 25th, 2006 01:11 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I kinda like this Hiashi too ^_^